Monday, February 27, 2012

part 2

part 2...enjoy!


Phillys was decided where they should go for lunch, a nice cafe, with a range of donuts and coffee to soups and sandwitches and delicate finger food with burgers and fries.
Dot ordered a ham sadwitch and Dave ordered a hamburger with a side of greasy fries and a bottle of orange pop.  They watched Victor, the towns police officer walk in and get his order; coffee and donuts, by now, everyone would remember what he would get, being a small town it was.

Andrew walked up to them, sitting down breifly and ordering a take out, glancing at Dot, he dropped a small note in her hand under the counter, but did it secretly so no one noticed and he walked out.

Dot acted like she was dizzy. Dave looked at her.
" You okay?" He asked.
" I just need some fresh air, I'll be back soon," She said.
And walked off, as she did unfolded the paper in her hand, it alarmed her.
" I warned you not to," 
Her eyes swelled. how did He know that she told Dave? She walked out, and down the sidewalk, when a hand went over her mouth and a pair of strong hands pulled her into the dark alley, she kicked and tried screaming, but all to no use, she was chloraformed and she went limp in the man's arms as he stuffed her in the car at the end of the alley. Andrew watched as the car drove off and he crushed the ciggerate in his hand.
" No!" He thought.
Its too late! 

to be continued!

--Rachel s


12 comments:

  1. Wonderful, Rachel!! It kept my attention through the whole thing!
    I am really enjoying your writing style. It's quick and exciting. Lately, I've been finding myself telling the readers too much. You know, saying she went here and then there, in too much detail. I'm afraid it will bore the readers.
    Anyway, don't you just LOVE the 30s and the 40s?!? It seems we have a lot in common :-) I really like that time period and I admit, most of my stories right now are in that time. At the moment, I am working on story with a girl detective in the 40s or 50s, and her name is Cali Morgan.
    Wow, sorry this was so long, LOL!
    Have a nice evening!
    Love,
    Kathryn ♥

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  2. thanks for your comment! I'm glad you like it!
    yes, I adore the 40's and 30's!

    thats okay! I love long comments! ;)

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  3. Ya, me too!
    Do you like old movies? I just love 40s movies with Bob hope, Bing Crosby, and all that. The old cars, the cute clothes, I luv it!

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  4. yes! I love old movies, like those old classics!

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  5. Yes!!! I'm a HUGE I Love Lucy fan... I have all the seasons.
    Have you seen any Road Movies? What about Arsenic and Old Lace or Singing in the rain? Those are some of my favorites :-)

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  6. no I havent. I've seen Roy Roger series...I like those have you?

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  7. I have seen a few. My brother has some of them! I like all the songs he sings, Trigger, and all that. And of course Dale Evans :-)
    Do you like Andy Griffeth or Dick van Dyke? Those are some other Black and white TV shows.

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  8. I love his music too! I have watched Andy Griffith and I love that show! and I've watched the other show too! their all great!
    oh ya, I have a main blog I do if you wanna check it out: http://rachelsblog-rachael.blogspot.com/

    :)

    --Rachel

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  9. I really like andy griffeth. Especially Barney :-D
    Okay, I will check out your blog! Thanks for the link! Here's mine:
    http://chattykathy-kathryn.blogspot.com/
    Love,
    Kathryn ♥

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  10. alright! I'll check yours out too!

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  11. Cool story! Can't wait for the next part!

    Would you like to check out my blog?

    godsgirlz1.wordpress.com

    ♥Godsgirlz1♥

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